After hearing Shirley Jackson's "The Lottery," write a story of similar genre based on the following prompt.
She was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door...
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DeleteGood story, i liked how you made a twist from death to a birthday party.
DeleteDidn't see that one coming XD
DeleteI liked how the twist was her birthday, but yet she died from something in the food that was bad.
DeleteIts kinda wierd how you made the end creepy but it was good. Stud
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door,the women hands her a check saying that you won $3,000 for the rest of your life. All we need you to do is sign this paper here and your address so we know where to send the check. Whats the catch says the house owner. There is none just sign the paper and you will receive $3,000. I guess if there is no catch then it won't hurt.
ReplyDeleteThree years later she has one kids the oldest is a boy named Mike who is two. She is making breakfast for Mike while her husband is out of town. Then she hears a knock on the door. She opens the door and their is a brute of a man and a mousy woman standing outside the door. The mom is like what do you guys want. The brute man says your child. The mousy women says when you sign the paper in the house two years ago you signed to give us your first born child go get him, she said to the brute man. The women who lives in the house yet today never saw her child Mike ever again.
She was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the big man grabbed her and the small woman asked what her name was. She struggled to break free, but it was inevitable she had been chosen. They hauled her to a nearby camp at the base of the volcano. She knew why she was here among the other 50 people chosen to be sacrificed. This day was known and anticipated through out the town. Every year on July 14 the council of the town gather together and select 50 people at random. These people will then be thrown into the volcano at precisely 12:00 p.m. By now you probably are thinking that this is a terrible thing to happen to you, but in the people's mind this was a tremendous honor as you are considered a hero. The people who are thrown in get the best two weeks of there lives starting on July 1st. They are thrown into the volcano by a belief that they will fight off fire demons for a year where they will then be replaced. Everyone that is thrown into the pit thinks this is true, even though imminent death awaits them in the volcano.
ReplyDeleteI like the fact that it a fast way to die and got some good words in there inside of worded everyone knows.
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DeleteI like that they were being sacrificed to fight off fire demons is nice. I didn't really expect that at first, I thought that maybe the two people at the door were just crazy. Great job., but does there sacrifice really keep the demons away.. or are they just wanting to kill 50 people a year?
DeleteI like the fact that they think they fight demons and that they will really die. The fighting demons is a good detail and twist to add. Also that you left it seeming that they were just dying and not fighting demons so it seems like it is just population control.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man and woman came in and said that they had been driving and there car has broke down and they needed some help. The woman ask if they could get some help and maybe some gas. The girl agreed to help them cause her husband was out of town working. As the house owner walked out to the car with the man and woman she thought to her self that maybe this wasn't a good idea because these people looked really weird. As she popped the hood up. She got hit with a metal object and when she woke she was in a dark room with no light. She didn't remember what happened till the man and woman came into the dark room. The woman still holding her clipboard. As the girl looked around she saw about a hundred died body and thats when they shot her. The woman made a check mark by her name and they were on to the next girl.
ReplyDeleteI like the twist with the dead bodies at the ending!
DeleteI liked how unique your story was
Deletevery good erica, it was very creative. i like the ending!
DeleteI like how your story was different and the unique imagination you used to write it
DeleteVery creative, fun story Erica. Good job! :)
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, she saw something that took her breath away, she saw her brother. He was currently serving in the military and wasn't suposed to be home for a couple of months. She ran into her brother's arms and started crying into his shoulder, it had been so hard at home without him there to help her when she needed some advice or just someone to talk too. She kept pinching herself just to make sure it wasn't a dream. When reality finally sunk in that he was really here and she wasn't just imagining it, she invited him inside to catch up and talk about all his great adventures. She closed the door behind him with a smile still on her face. He came inside and began telling her that he had to return to the United States because during a mandatory medical checkup the doctors found something that worried them, they found cancer. Even though they found it in the early stages, he still couldn't participate in combat or any other military mission. She didn't know at first, but then she realized that her brother was home, and that he has a battle of a different kind coming up in his life, and she had to be there to support him until he is ready to take the world on again.
ReplyDeleteVery creative, good transitions throughout the paper
DeleteGood settings in the story, and great way of showing the emotions that the main character had through out the story!!
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ReplyDeleteI would say to have another thing about this story instead of the real story you listened to .
Deleteit sound to much like the story she just read.
DeleteMake it longer and something without the lottery like the story had
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man said hello, she had a confused look on her face as the women started writing information down on her clipboard, she asked, can I help you with something? The man asked her a few questions and she answered them without any concerns. She asked what they were for and the guy wouldn't tell her. The little women continued to write on her clipboard as she was answering the mans questions. She was starting to get worried because she was giving out all of her personal information to these two suspicious people. After a few silent moments of the lady and man taking quietly they told her to follow them. With no questions asked she did. They told her she wasn't in trouble. She hoped in their vehicle and after about 20 minutes they arrived at this big old building. They helped her get out of the truck and push her into the building. As she walked down a long dark hallway they followed her. They arrived to a door, they opened it for her and pushed her in. The big buy with a candle walked in front of her, as she looked around she found a lot of other stranded dirty looking people who have been there for awhile. She loudly yelled "What is going on"? before she could do anything about it, she was on of those people being stuck in that building for days with all of these other people. She didn't know what was going on, whether or not they were gonna kill them, she was frightened. Their mouths were tapped shut. The men and the women continued to bring more people in everyday. Later she found out, as they were eating people, these two men and women were cannibals looking for healthy people to eat. And that is why she remembered they were interviewing her for her health in the beginning of the story.
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DeleteLook for punction mistakes and maybe come up with a better twist but intresting story
DeleteVery entertaining story. There are some errors in the story but other than that good job.
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ReplyDeleteWhat?... 8O
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ReplyDeleteI like this it has a really good twist to it.
DeleteGreat story but you have some spelling errors to fix
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DeleteVery interesting story. I think you might have some grammer errors that you might need to fix.
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DeleteI agree with the cast of the characters(Logan,Ryan,etc.)
DeleteIt was a very interesting story, I like how you used a lot of creative!
DeleteNice job of using people in the class, and good twist at the end
DeleteYou wrote a very good story, but you should probably learn how to spell Logan.
DeleteYou should capitalize names, spell words right, and check your grammar.
DeleteCreativity*
DeleteI like it alot it was good how logan had turrets, Perfect
DeleteVery nice, I like that thing about the monster truck. but there are some things you need to fix...
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man turned out to be Ryan Moser. The woman was logan doemeyer, unfortunately logan has terets and yelled out ugly. The teenage girl slapped logan and slammed the door. Moments later Hope, the teenage girl heard a loud rubble and there was suddenly a monster truck in her living room. It was logan, hope ran out the back door and got into her car. Out of no where her car turned into a transformer and flew away in to open abyss of space.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man and woman burst inside. The woman glanced at her clipboard. "Do you know why we are here?" the mousy woman, whose name tag said "Martha", asked. "Not a clue," the resident of the home replied. It was 6:30 A.M. Saturday morning. "No one would be here unless it was because of..." Her thoughts were cut off by the large man's squeaky voice, "We're really sorry," he said. The woman grew silent. She thought about the bills she had forgotten to pay. But the electricity had been off since right after her husband died. Martha and her partner were not familiar to the woman. Then it hit her. Her son. These people were from the military. Her baby boy was dead. She dropped to her knees and burst into tears. She folded her hands and cried a prayer that it was not real. That it was only a dream.
ReplyDeleteA good story with a surprising depressing ending.
DeleteInteresting catchy story, I like how you tied it all up to make the ending
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ReplyDeletevery good, great story change
DeleteVery good creativity Anna. I liked how you had such a wicked twist at the end. I kinda gave me the chills.
DeleteI have never heard of being put to death by so many snakes. But good way to end the story Anna.
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ReplyDeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man pulled out a gun. Her ex husband had hired a hit man to kill her. They had been married for 16 years before the divorce. Nicole had two children the ages of 14 and 11. They ran in to the room to see that their mother was dead. The oldest, Jackson, called 911, well Shara fell to the floor crying on her mother. The next day the kids where put in the fathers custody. Scott is a very strange, but strong guy who will not take crap from anyone. That is why his wife had to go. She had taken full custody over the kids and he was really mad. One day the kids where getting ready to go back to school the first time after the passing of their mother. The father stopped them and said, "You guys are not going to school today" and let out a evil laugh. This scared Jackson and Sarah, but they did not want to make their father mad so they obeyed. He told them to put blind folds over their eyes and get the car. Shara asked where they were going in a scared voice, but he wouldn't tell them. It was an hour drive. They got out at a ice cream shop. He was buying them ice cream and they screamed with happiness.
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DeleteThe story was very good I really liked the twist at the ending, and I liked the name of your main character.
DeleteI really liked the name of your main character and I think your story has a really good twist to it. This was a really good story.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man and the mousey women stood there silent. They looked at each other for awhile and until the mosey women quietly said were your parents. The girl didn't know what to do, so she invited them in. They sat down around the table and she got them something to drink and eat and they sat there and stared at each other. The girl living there was a orphan growing up but turned out to be very wealthy. She noticed the couple looking around her house with a grins on there faces. She looked at the clock to her right then looked back at the table and both were gone. She stands up in a panic to see where they went, to see the man holding a gun at her head.
ReplyDeletegreat story change abby. very creative!
DeleteWow Abby, greatest plot twist ever!! Couple spelling errors though :)
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, she saw that the man was her husband, but she didn’t know the woman. Her husband pulled her aside and sat her down on the couch. “Honey,” he said, “this is Monica.” The woman looked at Monica, confused. Her husband continued his introduction. “Monica and I...well we’ve been together for a while, behind your back. I’m sorry that I had to tell you this way, but we’ve done something unspeakable and we need your help.” The woman could feel anger and sadness overwhelm her as he said this. She stood up and asked her husband, “How could you? 15 years together and you do this to me? I have never been so angry in my whole life!” The woman pushed her coffee table over, spilling all the contents of it on the ground. The man stood and held his wife’s shoulders and looked her in the eyes. “I know what I did was wrong,” he said, “but Monica and I have done something that's worse than this. We killed a man, and we need to hide the body. He’s out in the back of my car. So if you could help us–” The man was cut off by the sound of a gunshot. While he was rambling on, his wife had grabbed her grandfathers rifle off of their fireplace mantle and shot Monica. The last thing he saw was the barrel pointed straight at him.
ReplyDeleteYou have a dark mind. The plot doesn't twist as much as it could, but it is still amazingly suspenseful! I want to read more.
DeleteMaysie, very creative with a good twist of the woman killing off the husband and Monica.
DeleteThis story was awesome Maysie :) I like how you made the readers think differently than what actually happens at the end. The suspense carried through the entire story.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, everything turned to black. She could hear the scratch of the pen on the clipboard as the man grabbed the bag she was forced into and started walking, dragging her in the bag along. "That's the last of the people on the list." The woman sighed. She couldn't move. Paralyzed, she realized what was happening. Before she could react, she felt her body fall from the man's arms and into the river. Screaming she tried to fight er way out, but it was too late. She could feel the bag opening, seeing the water escape through the bag. Gasping for breath she screamed her last scream, then her alarm clock went off.
ReplyDeleteI like how you didn't explain why they were throwing her into the river; that allows the readers to wonder why they were doing so. I also liked how you added the danger of the bag opening and her drowning. Good job :D
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, she could hear the two talking of something but could not comprehend what either of the two were saying. As the door creaked open she saw the two persons look at her with a very sharp look, as the man was a bout to talk she saw that he had a perfectly white smile that seemed to gleam as he spoke to her. He asked her her name and she promptly reply with “Yes that is my name.” The the eyes of the man seemed to lighten up a bit as she said this. “ My name is Col. Daniels and I am pleased to inform you that your husband will be coming home from the country of Iran in the next week.” As she heard this she was in tears with joy. “Thank you thank you thank you.” was her only reply as he said this, but then she noticed a hint of sadness as he said this. “What’s wrong?” she asked him, “Did something happen?” The officer looked to the mousey looking woman and replied “ Yes your husband and his squad was ambush on a road during and raid. During this an E.M.T went and killed several of the men.” “ So what are you saying?” was the women’s reply.... The Col. replied, “ Your husband was one of those men.
ReplyDeleteYou crush the dreams of readers everywhere. Way to ruin a happy ending. You threw me for a loop!
DeleteI really liked your story, but there's a lot of grammatical errors and run on sentences, so some parts didn't make sense. The twist in the story was pretty evil and dark, which I liked.
DeleteI agree with what Janelle and Maysie said, it was difficult to read at times. I really think you could have developed the Woman character better by actually saying her name instead of what you did. Good job otherwise.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, they gave welcoming smiles even though she were the one outside her house. She slowly returned a cautious smile and asked "Who are you?", with a quiet scared voice. They replied with "That is not the matter at hand, who are you?" She slowly stated her name. "I'm Emilee Rose Downey." They gave her a stern look,"And how old are you?" Her breath caught in her throat, "I'm 11 years old." They slowly turned to each other with a look of confusion, then turned back to her. "Why are you in this house alone?" She slowly started crying silent tears as she sank to the ground saying "My Mommy and Daddy left me here because I wasn't good enough." The two policemen turned to each other, the woman picked the little girl up and said, "It's alright, you are coming with me."
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DeleteThis seemed very creative and came from a different perspective than most people would think.
DeleteI like how you made the character different than the others by making her eleven years old, and the story behind it.
DeleteHow could you just leave me hanging like that? I wanna know what happens!!! Other than that, very good story :)
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, she noticed how simply the two were dressed. The man wore a pair of jeans, complete with a striped polo. The young woman wore a similar attire, jeans and a nice white blouse. Neither made a sound as the woman motioned them to come in to her home. They simply entered the house and began to look around the room, as if searching for something. No one made a comment as the woman led the two around the house. No comments were needed. She first led them upstairs and showed them the nursery, her daughter’s room, and the door to the attic. They then followed her back to the main floor, where she showed them her kitchen, bathroom, living room, dining room, and bed room. As she proceeded to lead them to the basement door, the man noticed something. He went over to pet the cat sitting in the corner, waiting expectantly for him. The couple then smiled, and told the woman that she had done a wonderful job watching their cat while they were on vacation, and that she had a beautiful home. They then took their cat and left, just as the woman’s family was returning from the movie.
ReplyDeleteIt's interesting how you made it sound suspenseful in the beginning, but creating a calmer twist at the end.
Deleteit was very interesting, but the cat part really threw and I love that you put so much detail into their clothing than compared to anything else
DeleteThat was definitely not what i expected, you made it sound like somebody was going to get hurt, but then they grabbed the cat and I was actually suprised.
DeleteGood twist with the woman cat sitting. You think that they are going to do something horrible, or they have an illegal deal, and it turns out to be something completely harmless!
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door the she realized why they were here; to take her to jail. The lady was a convicted felon, who had been proven guilty for bank robbery. As she walked towards she decided that there was no point to resist. The man outside pulled out something from his back pocket and then quickly hid it inside his front pocket before she could see what it was. As she walked to the door the man burst though before she could open it for him, he then proceeded to hand her the thing from his pocket, it was a gun. He then said “this is to help, when you escape contact us here.” He then handed her a piece of paper with a phone number on it and then left with the old woman.
ReplyDeleteSo mysterious.. I really want to know what happens next. Very well written.
DeleteYou kept me wondering what will happen next and left a good ending that made me curious as to what could happen if the story had kept going.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the women and man came after her. They held her down and asked her questions. One of the questions she couldn't answer because she was confused. The women yelled the question louder. Finally, she figured out why they were here. She has won the lottery. She started to try to get away as fast as she could, but the brute man was to strong for her. Now they have her caught and brought to down town for everyone to watch. She was thinking, today is my last day, I don't want this to happen. All of a sudden, everyone was cheering and screaming happy birthday today. She was relived. Though then, she thought about that question that the lady asked her. She forgot all about her birthday. It was today and she got all worked up because she thought it was her death day for the lottery. After the announcement, she thought a quick party and everyone had a great time. After all the fun and games, everyone started to get all worked up and everyone started to shove food down her throat. One person put something bad in her food and died right away. Not everything seems how it is.
ReplyDeleteI like the way the story turned around twice, it kept me thinking.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, she saw the bibles that they were holding. They asked, "Have you heard the good news?" She grabbed her 9mm handgun and shot one bullet in each of their heads. She knew exactly who they were and what they were after. She grabbed the woman's clipboard and saw the check marks by seveteen different names. The only one not checked was the bottom one, her name. These were undercover government officials and her best guess is that they wanted to kill all the secret agents involved in Project Omega. During this mission she had discovered that the United States was planning a full offensive attack on North Korea because not only had they developed nuclear weapons, they also had found a new element called Xraniumin which causes their nuclear weapons to be one hundred times more effective. She checked the bodies for weapons and found only one knife. It looked like they had expected to take her by surprise. She knew the government was after her now, but she knew exactly where to go...
ReplyDeleteI gotta admit this story threw me extremely off the beaten path and it was very interesting twist than anything that I thought it would
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, Alison heard them talking about how she was going to have a fun stay. She was so excited, she had signed up to win a cruise and for once, the luck was actually in her favor. She opened the door and the first thing they said was "Alison, you are under arrest for the murder of your 16 month old daughter." Alison broke down in tears. How could she murder her own daughter? Her daughter was with Tommy, her husband. She asked, "Where is my husband? He had the kids." They replied, "He's at the hospital coping with the death of your child. He said you shook her until she stopped crying."
ReplyDeleteI really like your story it has a really surprising end, and it was very good.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, a man came in and said that she was under arrest for breaking into a store because she was starving. She lives in poverty and had no food so she started to steal food because she couldn't get food any other way. Once she started stealing food it lead to stealing more expensive items like jewelry, and once she stool the jewelry then she would sell it for money. She was in debt from borrowing money from people and charging stuff to stores, that is why she started stealing more expensive stuff. So the man arrested her and put her in jail.
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ReplyDeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, they welcomed her to Pleasant Town, and asked her if she was ready for her surprise. The lady not living in the town for more then a couple days didn't know what the surprise could be. The man and women asked her to come with them she followed them through the town. As they walked through town everyone seemed to glare at her almost as if she did not belong there. The women asked where are you taking me, the small mousey women simply said you will find out soon enough. They soon came to a big building that said City Hall, they walked down many flights of stairs until they came to the basement. The man and women stopped not going any farther, she asked why will you not go any farther ? They both said at the same time we can not go in to that room your surprise is in there. The women looked at the door it seemed to be harmless she opened the door and walked into the room, she looked around she saw nothing in the room. Suddenly she hears the door close behind her, and the women says we don't welcome new people here, suddenly there was a rain fall of snakes falling on top of her bitting her. The women never made it back to her house and no one in the town ever saw her again.
ReplyDeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man and woman read her name off, Billy Jo Nextoyou. Asked her politely to please follow them down the street to the city hall to look through her files and the charges that she committed, to see if she will have to fill out her death papers. After they found her guilty, she was told to fill out the papers so they can be ran threw the machines, to fully charge her for her actions in life, and put her to death. The old lady was accused of not reporting monthly bills to the city, and murdering her family in the late 80's. Since she was not able to pay the bills for the times she missed the deadlines, and never served her time in jail for her felonies. Billy Jo Nextoyou was sentenced to be baked alive. She doesn't know when it will happen, just that she will be baked to death. Everyone in the town will remember Billy Jo Nextoyou for one reason she was the first old lady to be baked alive that survived.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the stories interesting twist at the end, and I really like the main characters name.
DeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the man and woman offered to give out a free gift card with millions of $'s on it. She accepted it, but there was a little trick to it. Even though she could buy whatever she wanted with that card, it has to be what she needs in life not something useless. After that day when she received her card, she went to the mall and got some items for herself; clothes, shoes, food, and some electronics. Even though they would probably use them they would probably be useless. She used the card and was band from the store. It turned out that these items she got was no use and was plain selfish. So, she went to another store and got items not for herself but others and the card was acceptable. Once she gave the items to the people, they used revenge on her and threw what she gave them back at her. She was taught that she shouldn't use something if she didn't get direct details on what to do in life.
ReplyDeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, the two people both asked in harmony if she would like to join their church. The lady holding the clipboard grabbed a pen out and ready to write a name down, "What's your name?!" the mousy lady asked excitedly. The girl told her that she wouldn't like to join their church but thanked them for asking. She closed the door and went to sit down. After a few minutes she realized she was hungry, so she went into the kitchen to get something to eat. While cooking she looks outside the window and sees those two people peering at her through the window mouthing something. She runs into the living room and tries calling the police but the phone didn't work. Then she starts to hear knocking again, thinking it's those people she starts to scream. Then out of know where the door breaks down and she passes out. When she wakes up she's on a blanket outside on the grass away from the house and the police, fire department and an ambulance is there along with those two people. She asks "What's going on?" The brute man replies to her saying "There was a weird smell coming from your house that smelled like gas when you shut the door, so we called the police. They had to turn your electricity off and get you out of there before an explosion happened." She then thanked and apologized to the two church strangers and thanked the police for getting her out of the house.
ReplyDeleteShe was home alone when she heard an anxious knock on her front door. The rapping was loud and unending. She wasn't expecting company, so she peered through her peek hole. A brute of a man and a mousy woman stood just outside the door. The woman was holding a clipboard. The man continued to knock. As she opened the door, The small lady said, "Are Lucy Mclock?" "Yes" she said "We'd like to ask you some questions about the night of the 16th." said the tall man." "I was home that evening and don't know anything about what happened," Lucy said as she shut the door. She walks over to the phone and dieles a number written on her hand. Then a man at the man answers at the other end "They are here at my door and they're on to us," she said.
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